Rulz Are Changed...~

The lives are Falling down,

There is no one tearing around,

Now,

     The Rulz are changed,

And Now

     No ones feels the pain,

Coz

Everyone living a lie

No one wanna  Die

Everyone wants to gain

No one wants the pain...~

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Imara]

Great piece. The slang here I don't think works, you are talking about a very serious issue and not one which is particular to a younger generation which would use this slang nor is anyone speaking. "... wanna to Die" It's either 'wants to die' or 'wanna die' "wanna to" doesn't work because "wanna" itself is a slang contraction of that phrase.

Now I really love the meaning here, the fact that everyone has a big dream. Everyone whats to be rich, famous and happy but that no one is going to work hard enough to actually get there. I love it, you have such a realistic outlook on life and you talk about such refreshingly new subjects. Great Job!

[Broken.Words]

thanks for your critique on my every write i corrected (that wanna to ) I'm not an english man thats why i make such mistakes and thanks to you for correctin them...~
:)

[Imara]

Haha grammaris not everyone forte. It took me a long time to get the hang of it. At least your improving :)

[Broken.Words]

:)

[Chris]

I have a sense these are lyrics - if so they fit. The title needs correcting IF it isn't intended. "Rulz" in the text works as lyrics.