Ditched

When does it matter?
When will you see?
That the love I have for you will kill me
When will you understand?
When will you know?
That my best efforts aren't just for a show
When will you realize?
When will you strive?
To know that your best friend is no longer alive
Without you I am nothing
Without you I cry
I thought our friendship meant more than a guy
You don't know how this effects me
Neither do you care
That's why I felt it was right to end this affair
I wish I could live inside you
I wish you didn't change
So I could recieve your love in exchange
The scale is not even
I've told you this before
But you have drained me down to the very core
No one sees it
No one speaks
As the tears continue to run down my cheeks
I know I'm not crazy
I know I'm not weird
Because this is exactly what I feared
So go next door and spend all your time with him
Because its "something that you lack"
Just know that when you're done, I won't be here when you

get back.

 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love what you're saying in this poem & how it reflects the circular way we go crazy in our minds, wanting someone to pay more attention, or trying to be more a part of this other person's life. But if a connection isn't happening, & sometimes you just can't make it happen, so you have to go. Put an end the hopeless longing. The other person may feel ditched, but the one who's leaving was ditched long before making a break. Once in a while your rhymes feel like a reach, not an organic part of your expression (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Broken.]

Thanks for your visit barleygirl. And yes, this was quite some time ago so my views have changed greatly in my old(er) age (: I understand much more now and this is just something that happens in life. Surely I have let go of a lot since this was written, and feel I have grown wiser from it. Sorry the rhyming is somewhat forced, but only because I enjoy when poems rhyme from time to time (;
Xxx

[R E Tree]

This is a beautiful and sensational poem. It has a breath-taking tone and its so true. Written from the heart I can tell. Many poeple can relate to this. But I like your way of writing it.

[darkgurl]

I know I'm not crazy
I know I'm not weird
Because this is exactly what I feared

I like these words. This is powerful and emotion filled.

[grady sedgwick]

well done and well said. some really good poetry here and communicated so well what it's like for a teenage girl to lose her best friend to a guy. nice job.

[I Am Svetlana]

There's alot of powerful emotion in this and I like how you expressed it. You expressed it real well. Good job!

[Myk Malice]

i like the emotion involved, it made me think of some of my own relationships that have turned out similar. good work.