"BROKEN WINGS"

 

Just like in the movies, I want to kiss in the rain.
I want the passion, the romance and none of the pain.

I want excitement, adventure, I want to travel the land.
I want to feel free, while holding your hand.

I want to stay up for hours, and talk through the night.
I want to find laughter, while being held tight.

I want to be the rainbow on your cloudest day.
I want you to need me, and want me to stay.

Would you run far away if I ask you to go?
Would you think I was crazy, and just tell me no?

I know I'm a dreamer, but what can I say?
Like a flower in spring, that's gone the next day.

I want to be wanted and thought of all day.
Just like a trapped bird, waiting to fly far away.

I don't know who I am, just who I've grown to be.
Like a broken wild horse......That's drowning at sea.

Reviews

[darkgurl]

I don't know who I am, just who I've grown to be.
Like a broken wild horse......That's drowning at sea.

I really enjoyed the closing lines, This is so emotional and so well written.
I really enjoy the way you are open with your stuff. This is amazing outpour!

[Michaela Briggeman]

This is...amazing. I use that word a lot, but this time, it is because I cannot find a better word. I mean, I could break out the ol' thesaurus but, I'm still in awe. This is just....woah! You captured emotions and details, and seriously...woah! This is amazing! Haha, I look forward to reading more of your writing!!

[sammyj]

wow I like this alot! great start...

[Lawrence Taylor]

Though you may be broken and wild, those are the very best kind of people, and the ones with true feeling as you've displayed so lyrically here.

[Loner]

Loved it till the end!!!

[The Cute 1]

I don't know who I am, just who I've grown to be.
Like a broken wild horse......That's drowning at sea.i love that

[Crow]

Beautifully written.

[deeps]

Such depth! A powerful well written write.

[Dream Weaver]

Beautifully written with such softly
spoken words that have tremendous
power with each line you've penned.
Sweet very sweet...

[Rapterj]

Mmm... again, you've got loads of meaning and epth to each of your words, as if they were carefully chosen. Personally, I was all over your creative analogies as they really defined this piece and took it where it needed to go.