The Divorcee Chronicles pt. 2 "He's Understandably Confusing"

Check out Pt. 1

"Cause you can't jump the track, we're like cars on a cable and life's like an hourglass, glued to the table. No one can find the 'rewind button' girl, so cradle your head in your hands....... and breathe, just breathe"

                                         Anna Nalick, "Breathe(2AM)"

 

 

the divorcee' chronicles part 2 

("He's Understandably Confusing")

                       by Brjden "Bridgette" Crewe

 

Previously at the end of part 1....

 

And if you don't help me, I might

Never find another like you!!

And with tears in my eye sight,

I stand before you and ask...

 "Will you please......

save my life?"

 

 (continued)

I think to myself

He wants me to save his life?

 

He's so blind!!!

But, I need to see for him...right?

 

I sit & wait with the patience of an isolated mountain

As he debates our inevitable fate with a confused look on his ruggedly difficult face

Counting................

Seconds turn into uneventful decades seemingly

But our relationship realistically have been years of dramatic mysteries that could completely SINK our history and leave it tasting 'BITTERSWEET' 

 

He's so deaf!!!!

He couldn't even hear

the hymn that my love

sings out in front of him!!!

 

Waiting...

I wait for him to see my entirety

To swim inside of my love that I present to him

passionate, repeatedly tested, wrapped inside of an impenetrable gift box nested for his unwrapping

 

The love that I have for him

replenishes like the blood

of a healthy, pumping heart

with a rhythm that starts & end as a fetus

resting peacefully inside her mother's garden  

 

It beats only for him

When he cries, I weep equally, matching him

tear for tear as his pain

becomes the same shared reciprocally

in our disdain

 

Everything in me, my friends, my family, even the mirror is telling me, to move on

but when I move...

I move...

    towards...

                Love

 

All my love can only be found

within this man

 

And I love him with the rage

 of a fire burning

Of dry oak soaked in gasoline!

 

What's wrong with men?

If God made them any dumber they would live underwater with gills & swimming fins!

 

Doesn't he know that if he gave himself to me completely

I wouldn't pain

but lovingly care for his heart

and tame

the misery from his past

that he desperately holds claim!

I would love him tremendously

trembling the spirits of his divorce!

Blessing his force with my Ye Yo

and giving life to his NEXT LIFE

with me as his halo!   

That's the way women are simply made...

to love

 

We endure, we conquer,

We mother the fathers

And we shine, refine

and simply define...

                             LOVE

 

I'm thinking all of this, then I ask...

 

"Why can't you tell me what happened

with your wife?

Why must you hold on to a pain that reigns

within your love life?

I want to love you!

I'm trying to love you fully and true!

But I can't go at it alone,

and walk this path without you!"

"I know....."

So tell me why you won't let me inside?

"Because I'm not only divorced

My wife....She died"

 

 

TO BE CONTINUED...

Author's Note

Before you ask..... Yes this is all true, except we didn't rhyme when we spoke! LOL I wanted to write as this woman. Though I love to write as different characters, it was difficult to write as her because she was so close to me and instead of being 100% creative, I had to empathize with her which only made me feel bad because I know now how she could have possibly felt. Even though I'm putting myself out there, it's surprisingly fun and cathartic! I really want to love this woman, but the divorce and the loss is a little too much. It's easy to say "time heals wounds", but I challenge that theory. I hope you stick around for what's next. I hope you all have read pt 1 or this may be a little confusing......

I almost wish I didn't include the last 4 lines. People focus on those as oppose to understanding the core of this one. And also, because I've been asked, "Ye Yo" is 'mother' in Swahili.

Reviews

[Lyrical Love]

i hate you first for sending this to me while i am trying to watch my favorite tv show-GREY'S ANATOMY! secondly for posting this! and asking me to read it. Yes, it is an awesome piece of course but, the content has me flippin' crying, and wondering why. this is too much to be lured in by your funny little avatar, and for you to possess the characteristics of a writer that equates to some of my favorites that have many books published! (i feel like i can't breath)
this makes me think that my problems are so minuscule in comparison. reading this was like forbidden sex-saying stop but actually wanting more.
You always amaze me!!

[Brianna Brie]

Everything in me, my friends, my family, the mirror is telling me, to move on but when I move........

I move........

towards...........

Love

See this is why your writings are well received. We love real life drama. We can all relate to sufferings of the heart. When you put yourself out there, you are saying it is alright to be who you are. I applaud your courageous writing style!

[Bud]

You're probably the most talented and creative person I've read, who uses "everyday" language (for the most part) and the most "common" areas of topic. Brilliance...Genius...Excellence!!! Your work is most worthy of being published. May your creative flow endure forever!!!

[Bud]

You're probably the most talented and creative person I've read, who uses "everyday" language (for the most part) and the most "common" areas of topic. Brilliance...Genius...Excellence!!! Your work is most worthy of being published. May your creative flow endure forever!!!

[Katherine Wyatt]

I really needed this piece of writing today...Thank you for putting yourself out there...

[Lady V]

Okay..................What do I say to a writer who can contribute so much without knowing the power behind it? Well, I am at a lost for words because this piece is a memory for me. Trust is a powerful thing and with out it even the greatest wall will crumble. As individuals we choose not to allow others close enough to hurt us but when we take that into a relationship...............we are hiding ourselves from the person we love. Wow. I do agree with Lyrical Love about this being a strong piece and compared to work I have read prior to this...................WOW. Bridgey you have really out done yourself. Thank you for the read requests. Im about to read part one.

Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

[Farrah Grahm]

wow, well, this one has a very powerful ending...

I must say, the beginning (after that excerpt of the previous poem) of this one is completely all over the place. It could benefit a lot from editing, although its a great skeleton.
Most of the time, I would say that type of organization adds a mood to the poem, this time...>_<

of course, I'm only one person, I just think it needs a little tightening up [i got a really strict C.W professor this semester, real prude, real mean in workshop. I think he's made me more critical >_

[24KMind]

another grand slam.... I know who this is about! (sing songey tone)....LOLOLOLOL

[Dani California]

You have such a great gift (and I believe I've said this before) of being able to place yourself in another's mind to tell a story. And in the mind of a female no less. lol I thought men didn't understand us. You must be the exception (such a sexist statement, I know. I'll likely hear about that one).

We've discussed the fact that the reviews here are sometimes lacking in constructive critism or overly sugary, though I must say I truly find no fault in this piece. Normally I would be distracted by the change in font size and color, though somehow you make it work. It benefits the piece by stressing the level of emotion behind the words.

The content is powerful and very emotional. The last lines don't encompass the entire write, but are perfect for they leave the reader wanting more, wanting to see what comes next.

You are completely original... love it.

[EmpressPoetess]

Well, firstly, this isn't a poem, it's a short story. It's very emotional and truly depicts the way a woman loves, the depth and tenderness is in here and the longing is felt. I don't find anything wrong with the last 4 lines, they belong where they are. This is finely written, although I hate the changing fonts and colors!(:
it takes away from your elegant writing style, which I really like!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The pain of divorce can last a longtime... I know from experience... the pain and confusion of wondering what happened and what went... your dialect keeps the reader transfixed as you roll through the emotions allowing the reader to feel too... I am interested to se where it leads.