His Eyes

His Eyes

Could be filled with all of the colors,

Or maybe just a few,

Green or blue,

Could be filled with grief and tears,

Or maybe just happiness,

They avoid all his fears,

Whether hazel or brown,

They all show his feelings,

Especially his frown,

They show all his love,

They never falter,

Not even for a pretty dove,

Even when he's scared,

Maybe just for a nightmare,

They will always fare,

Those eyes,

Those perfect beautiful eyes.

Author's Note

I am not great with Rhyme scheme, which is why I do so many free verses. I just sort of felt this one but it required a bit more effort than my normal poems do. What do you think? Any suggestions?

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Aw, Brittany!
This a delight to read, as it hops, skips, and flows down the page with such a happy jaunt.
If you wrote this charming Free Style poem for that special guy, I know he is still smiling, and I am, too, from the sheer loveliness in your poetic voice … you touch both the mind and the heart, as excellent poetry should.

Kudos and many thanks, Brittany, for blessing the morning with beauty and happiness …
hugs to you! ⁓ Richard

(psst! consider omitting "of" throughout)

[Brittany Bostic]

Thank you for such wonderful words. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :)

[Richard🖌]

You are welcome, Brittany … what about my suggestion you asked for to make it better?
The "of" words are unnecessary and monotonous, and are the only issue that makes this less than virtually perfect to the reader's mind's-eye and ear. My reviews are never token.

[Brittany Bostic]

Thank you I corrected it and like it much more now.

[Richard🖌]

Ah, so you deleted my comments … never mind, your poem smiles with skill much more deserving "of" your brilliant poetical effort, and as a teacher of poetry, my smiles are genuine to You. : )
Many bright blessings, Brittany! ⁓ Richard

[Brittany Bostic]

Oh no, I just understood what you meant after reading your next comment. I decided to change it and like it a lot this way. Thank you

[Richard🖌]

I humbly bow!

[Coyote Poetry]

The eyes can steal our soul and our thoughts.
"Those eyes,
Those perfect beautiful eyes."
I enjoyed the flow of thoughts leading to nice ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Brittany Bostic]

Thank you for your review

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Kimberly Navarro]

absolutely beautiful. Perfect depiction of how eyes are the windows to our souls. And yes, the look in his eyes speak multitudes! Blessings. very nice piece.

[Brittany Bostic]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Urja Gokani]

YOU WRITE AN AMAZING POEM ON JUST TWO WORDS "HIS EYES" AND THATS AMAZING IT WAS A GOOD POEM THANKS FOR SHARING IT KEEP IT UP !!! :)

[Brittany Bostic]

Thank you so much for such kind words about this piece! :)

[Urja Gokani]

welcome :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like it...and the near rhyme in next to last stanza really works great.

i think free verse is best most often because rhyme will be forced...and not feel natural to the reader.

but you pull it off here, and this does feel natural.

[Brittany Bostic]

Thank you very much for your kind words. I was hoping others would feel the same way about this poem.