Envy being the Enemy

A shadow consistantly taking up space Sitting next to me With its taunting glory Taking me by the sholders It's pushing me down I get back up, trembling And get pushed, harder I find I have no reason to get up anymore All I see is shadows Every dark blot Over powering the air I breathe I'm lying in one dark hole I can see the blood pushing its way out The envy takes my own small victory Saying I'm easy to take over I know I can't win There's always a shadow Sitting in the desk next to me With a smirk on its face While I watch my sleeve soak up my tears

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[An owl on the moon]

Such a deeply emotive, moving write! The dark companion to your sorrow and pain. Beautifully haunting!

[Raef C. Boylan]

Grammar tip:

"it's" = it is
"its" = belongs to it, no apostrophe for this one

so

"With it's taunting glory" (its)
"With a smirk on it's face" (its)
"I can see the blood pushing it's way out" (its)

Hmm. A personnification of envy?
Envy causing the S.I?
Or envy being a by-product of S.I, i.e. envying those who don't self-harm?

The tone of this is good, matter-of-fact description of the situation.

I think 'over-powering' i either one word or two words hyphenated...not sure though.

Good piece.
Thanks for sharing it.