first can down

to my mom

First can down

You're fine,

Everything is chill now,

Relaxing after work time

Second can down

You're feeling your self let go,

You're feeling easy now,

Nobody is telling you to stop so...

Forth can down

You're having fun

All your troubles are gone now,

You feel bright as the sun

Sixth can down

You're slurring your words,

You don't see that your child is scared

No because you are too busy,

Too busy having "fun"

Eight cans down

You ask her to get you another,

But she says no

"get your a*s in there and get me another one you piece of s**t."

She's scared of what you might do so she does what she is told

Tenth can down 

She says something wrong,

It could have been word,

But it doesn't matter,

You will still punish her

Eleventh can down 

There's blood on the floor,

You're knuckles hurt,

She's in the corner crying,

But you don't see anything wrong

Twelfth can down

You feel dizzy

She's still crying

You fall to the floor,

She's dying inside watching you

Thirteenth can down

You finally give, and fall one last time

She gets up from the corner and walks you to your room

She'll never tell anyone about this,

Nor will you remember

You're asleep now

She's in the living room cleaning,

All the cans, all the blood

She won't sleep tonight

She blames herself, just like the other times

She'll believe that she deserved this, 

She deserved the beating she got

She hates herself, she thinks you hate her too

Little do you know that this was the end

She grabs your gun from your closet,

she goes into her room and closes the door

She pulls the trigger with no hesitation

All that's left is a note

For you is all she wrote

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Chillest]

i love this, this is a really creative way of showing the affect of drinking, i respect and enjoy this alot, btw thanks for the chill things u said about my writing ^^ your stuff is way better than mine XD

[Josiah Morgan]

This... wow. This is currently the frontrunner in the depressing poem contest