Scared Of Me

Look what you have done to me.

Or look what I've done to myself.

Myself is gone and I can't breathe.

Not yet sure if I should scream for help.

I am so scared of me.

Would anyone even want to help?

I was always there when they needed me.

But I am just the burden that is myself...

I needed you to never leave me.

I guess you're scared of me too.

The world never wants around someone in strife.

So I smile and give you everything you like.

That is my job, to only give you delight.

Take it all as I hold on for dear life.

This pain could all end with the point of a knife.

This thought terrifies me...

I've lived my whole life just to make you smile.

But you ripped away the soul I once had.

This is not like me; sick of the mental trial.

Seeing you all laugh used to make me glad.

But you've made me scared of me.

I do not want to go.

But you don't care if I stay.

Why should I stay if I'm alone?

Without any love my world is gray.

My brain keeps arguing...

I used to be scared of everyone,

Now I'm only scared of me.

Reviews

[Jack Wolfe]

Hmm. . . When I first signed on this morning the first thing I saw was, Brit Saunders, “I really, really hate poetry.” Curious as you have penned quite an emotionally charged piece. The wording in and of itself is simplistic, but I think it adds to the overall depth of the questions being present not only to the reader but to the writer. “Would anyone even want to help?” this line alone speaks of self-consciousness, the feeling of being alone even in a crowded room, and the sense of being under-appreciated. “The world never wants around someone in strife.” A very true statement, as most avoid drama/strife, unless it affects them personally, here you need to insert (to be, around). “This is not like me; sick of the mental trial.” I would replace the semicolon here, and insert a dash or ellipses to show pause/the break, or insert (I’m sick) as other wise it can’t stand alone. The rawest emotion is FEAR, and fear of oneself is common, yet the degrees change . . . the degree changes in this magnify that realism quite well.

[Skai Rain]

I am unsure if I truly hate poetry, but I hate writing it. I feel like I have skills that can't break through with poetry. Thank you for reading and reviewing, it means a lot.

[Malister Mikey]

The scariest person in this world is yourself for it is your decisions that ultimately choose your fate, I liked this poem very much and it is relatable, I am afraid of myself to the point I can not even attempt to live alone for it is only the fact others keep me strong.

I really enjoyed this poem it was very well done.

Sincerely, Malister Mikey

[Skai Rain]

I know that all too well. Thank you for reading.

[Malister Mikey]

You are very welcome thank you for posting

[H McG]

This poem has a really powerful message. I can really feel the intensity of your emotions all the way through this and you make it very relatable. Nice work.

[Skai Rain]

I am glad you enjoyed. Thank you for reviewing.

[AprilRN1210]

Fear is a powerful thing and is a demon that haunts many.. the scars of the past still hurt and allow that fear to have more control over us than we realize sometimes.. you express that well here.. I will say the colors are a little distracting, and really (in my opinion) not needed.. I stumbled on some of the phrasing as well in this one.. overall the emotion is there and is pretty powerful.. one thing I noticed..

"Myself is gone and I can't breath."... did you mean "breathe?"

I really enjoy when a writer can make me FEEL with their words and you have done that here, so nice job:)

[Skai Rain]

Thank you very much for your review and input. I shall fix the error right away.

[Wraith]

Beautiful. A work of art that refers to the real enemy. The one inside us all. What we see in our world depends on how we look at it. A matter of perspective can be the difference between life and death. Stay strong, we need more writers like you.

[Skai Rain]

Thank you very much

[yuki]

This is one of the best poems from you that i really enjoy. Im am also like this even if im only a teen i can relate so so much to this because i feel this most of the time and feel like i will fall and break and will be afraid of myself in that stage. Great write

[Skai Rain]

Thank you. The teenage years are normally the hardest years, I promise it will get better.

[yuki]

They certainly are and i will thank you