Bread Crumbs and Enigines

We stood together

back to back

and pumped like pistons

in a well oiled machine

till we rusted from friction

having stood too still

misfiring

ignite

backfiring

we stall over words

then roar into words

find a country road

lined with trees

near a lake

we dine with the ants

on I miss you's

(Is it sunny where you are?)

If I drop bread crumbs,

would you follow them?

Reviews

[Acer]

Nicely written indeed, i loved few lines here, those lines are,

we stall over words
then roar into words
find a country road
lined with trees
near a lake
we dine with the ants......

very nice, what a great piece, first two lines shows "our voice's roarness"
& last three lines shows that "Eat with ant's, walk with them, feel free to feel wind's of tree's, near a peace...Occean,lake.....

loved very much indeed. Well written.

[Hippy]

I like how this uses an engine as a metaphor, i like engines. But you spell it wrong in the title.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

is this hansel and gretal sequel 2?

looks interesting:) what happens next?

[Chavon]

It's anybody's guess :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

do telll

[Chavon]

you have three L's

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

wot r Ls? Loaves of bread?

[Chance]

Nice work great style. Thanks for posting!

[Chavon]

much thanks!

[Michael X]

picturesque, emotive and conceptualized idea, an exotic outlook on desire, I like this poem and the form.

[Chavon]

much thanks!

[Phillitup]

This is a very interesting concept not to mention that this was incredibly well-written. Nicely penned and best regards, Dell

[Chavon]

Thanks you!

[Satan's Daughter]

Very unique and original. I enjoyed reading it :)

[Chavon]

Thanks you!

[AWickedMoon]

An very interesting poem. :)

[Chavon]

Thanks you