I Never

I Never

A Poem by Southern Angel

I never thought I could ever

Love, Care, Adore, Cherish

Someone so much

I never thought I could ever

Treasure, Admire, Appreciate

Someone so much

And now I miss everything about you

 

I see your brown eyes

Every time I close mine

When I think about your smile

I just have to smile

When there’s total silence

It’s really not cuz I hear you

 

I never thought that anyone could ever

Love, Care, Adore, Cherish

Someone so much

I never thought that anyone could ever

Treasure, Admire, Appreciate

Someone so much

And after all the things we've been through

© 2011 Southern Angel


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This poem is decent. The way that you structured the first and third stanzas I liked, with the repetition of "love, care, adore, cherish" and "treasure, admire, appreciate" meshing together nicely with the surrounding lines, and given them a nice lyrical flow. Overall, I feel like the poem is just a little bit too simple, and the second stanza isn't up to the level that it should have been considering that it's basically the core of the poem--the first and second stanzas mirror each other, and there is a lot of repetition, so the middle of the work needed to really stand out. In particular, the middle two lines of that stanza which both end in "smile" felt a little weak. Please don't think I'm dissing your poem though, because the main thing that's important is that you expressed whatever you were feeling well, and feel like you've done that =)

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Sadness is a faithful foe, but love does battle best, we poets, with your words will waste the sadness evil zest. Well done, great read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awwwwww!!! so cuuuutee!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Southern Angel

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