I Never

I never thought I could ever

Love, Care, Adore, Cherish

Someone so much

I never thought I could ever

Treasure, Admire, Appreciate

Someone so much

And now I miss everything about you

 

I see your brown eyes

Every time I close mine

When I think about your smile

I just have to smile

When there’s total silence

It’s really not cuz I hear you

 

I never thought that anyone could ever

Love, Care, Adore, Cherish

Someone so much

I never thought that anyone could ever

Treasure, Admire, Appreciate

Someone so much

And after all the things we've been through

Reviews

[Aarontastic]

This poem is decent. The way that you structured the first and third stanzas I liked, with the repetition of "love, care, adore, cherish" and "treasure, admire, appreciate" meshing together nicely with the surrounding lines, and given them a nice lyrical flow. Overall, I feel like the poem is just a little bit too simple, and the second stanza isn't up to the level that it should have been considering that it's basically the core of the poem--the first and second stanzas mirror each other, and there is a lot of repetition, so the middle of the work needed to really stand out. In particular, the middle two lines of that stanza which both end in "smile" felt a little weak. Please don't think I'm dissing your poem though, because the main thing that's important is that you expressed whatever you were feeling well, and feel like you've done that =)

[Knoxxeh]

This is a very good poem and I can see not only do your poems relate to you but they basically follow your life and kindof take us step by step of what is happening to you, that is brilliant.
Great Job

[Lover109]

i love this(:

[absolutefolie]

I can really relate to this poem, and I loved it. Well done :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

deep emotions expressed so well.........

[Rayne Stanton]

The first and the last stanzas I really like. I like the feel of the repetition and the changing last lines. Nice write :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem of love and desire. I like your happiness and understanding hard time make people stronger. A very good ending to a excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Deviant Works]

Awww! Tear...snivel... You did a wonderful job building the emotion in this piece and then closed it perfectly in my opinion. It was as if you told a story of how you love, so deeply and honestly. And then in the end, after all the missing, after all the things you have been through, you are reminded of how much you truly love. It was the closing line that made this piece, made me sigh as I, too, understand that exceptional feeling. The message was beautifully stated.

[Kelly M.]

I loved this! :) And especially liked the repeated stanzas that really went harmoniously together. It was really beautiful! A definite 100/100! Great write! :)

[H. Davidson]

Sad but pretty. It really emphasizes how we love and lose so easily, when we didn't think we would ever find love in the first place. Good job sweety!