What AM I Doing?

Damn,

What am I doing?

First it’s one

Then it’s two

Next it’s three

Every four hours

Damn,

What am I Doing?

I’m taking them

To forget it all

But it only helps

For a little while

Then it starts

Over & forever

It goes on

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't like any kind of medicine. I try to use the natural cures. Pills can blind you. Few pills can help you. Easy to fall to drugs and booze. The poem tells a real story. Many need the pills to be able to get out of bed and face the world. That is a sad and hard life. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Knoxxeh]

So this got a really dark feel to me on the way someone might take it but none the less
Great Poem

[H. Davidson]

I really like this poem. It feels like a never ending circle. But that's life isn't it? You say so much without a whole lot of words. I love poems like that. Good job!

[Rayne Stanton]

its really good and a good way to describe something as overpowering as addiction

[Aarontastic]

This is a really minimalist poem in a lot of ways, which suits it well. You didn't state the subject of the poem explicitly, but it's pretty apparent from the text of it (and the picture XD) what you're talking about...at first, I thought that the poem would be better off with more substance to it, explaining perhaps what was trying to be forgotten, or adding more descriptive language. BUT when I read it over a couple of times, I actually felt it was better off the way it is--since it's written in a kind of choppy style, without too many words, it gives the feeling of a dream/trance-like state, which makes sense since it's about taking too many pills. Not elaborating on what 'it' was that was bothering you was also a good choice, I think...it leaves it up to the viewer's imagination, and they can project their own feelings onto it. I don't know if that's what you were going for or not, but it's just kind of the way it came across to me, and I really liked it.

[rwar ish me]

good poem, keep wrting, would love to hear more from you!

[Awkward]

Sadly too many people wonder this. Addiction can be a horrible thing, I liked the way that you put it in words. Thank you for sharing.

[Sukriti Suki]

the vicious circle...once we give in, it's so hard to get out!!short, few words but aptly put.

[GreenSkeleton16]

good way to portray addiction

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Addiction is a vicious cycle. One numbs them self to forget the pain of life and only compounds the pain and the problems. Well penned.