My shining star

Another about my ex. Don't worry, I'm not suicidal or anything just needed a way to end the poem. LOL! I'm over him though but it was a good excuse to write another poem.

I have been a little upset

You crushed my dreams, made me forget

About all the joys that life may bring

In summer, winter, fall, or spring

I loved you with all my soul

You were the one that made me whole

Me meeting you

Was a dream come true

I fell for the lie that you thought this too

But I was the only one that had thought this through

"I love you so much" is what you said

And then these thoughts raced through my head

"I love him more" is what I thought

While he thought for sure he had me bought

For a long time he sure did

Until I discovered what he had hid

His virginity was lost but not to me

Through his lies I sure did see

Forgiveness though is what I chose

For you'll find thorns on every rose

This thorn though, tore my skin

Not on the surface but within.

I patched the wound but there's a scar

And then he said goodbye

I have lost my shining star

So now I wish to die.

Reviews

[sam]

nice job

[mariah]

nice job brianna! its got great flow to it. keep on writing :)

[Skye]

My favorite lines were 'For you'll find thorns on every rose' and 'not on the surface but within' Nicely written. Good job.

[Katy Stash]

Wow spectacular! Is a very good poem