Scars of Remembrance

Those beautiful eyes,

That once contained happiness,

Are now raging with anger,

Clearly displaying that the flame within you is now untamed,

Taking over as if it's your master and you are its puppet. 

The cuts on your arm,

Match the ones on your heart,

Leaving scars of remembrance.

The shadows you now live in,

Consume the new you,

Gradually crushing the source of life........the pulse of what use to be.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think!(: Even if you don't like it, leave comments on how i can improve or leave advice?!(: Thanks! :D

Reviews

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I like this a lot. Deep and dark. Excellent work.

[Simmirose]

This is amazing bri. i love it.

[xSamilynnx]

wow really good bri :D i like it keep it up!!!!!

[PaperLife]

Your words leave an already too dark sky darker. Screaming and crying the things so bashed and frightened. Like a feeling so tainted and overrated. It just presses and tensely awakens.

Showing the hurt inside the cuts. More then physical something so good like the bad things we've been subjected to. Expressing paint so overly used. Your words make a world that tears and tears like a hook at the hearts. Then sewing it together, implanting the pain you can't stand not feeling. Speaking the true meaning to why humans do this. Where it's not just mental but something so real and good. Where innocence was just a word.

Well done.

[gman]

This is really good. From the first line to the last, it really reached out to me. Great work :)

[That_Guy]

The first five lines are amazing, great analogies.