Prologue

"Push me higher!" I shouted at Lucas. He shoved me a little harder on the swing. "Come on ,Lucas. I want to fly!" he pushed me his hardest and jumped when I reached the top. I closed my eyes and waited for the impact of the ground.
When I landed I sat on the ground and waited for Lucas to come over. This is what we did everytime we were scared. We'd come to the park. Lucas would push me, I'd jump and he'd always ask the same question:

"How do you feel?" he asked laying down on the grass beside me. I'd always answer the same way.

"I felt like you and I were only people left in world, and all our problems were gone" I sighed. Lucas grabbed my hand and we sat there in silence.

"You know what I was thinking about Callie?" Lucas interrupted the silence.

"No, Lucas. What were you thinking?" I sat up.

"I want to be your first kiss so that when you move you'll always remember me."

"Lucas, I'll always remember you, forever."

"I know, Callie, but I wanna be your first kiss. So....can I?"
I just nodded slowly looking into his eyes. When he leaned in I kept my eyes on his mouth and when his lips touched mine I closed my eyes.
I had never kissed anyone, but I sure did like kissing Lucas. I leaned into him. I know he'd kissed a lot of girls in his eight years of life, but I hoped I was special.
I knew I'd be leaving soon. I knew I'd miss him. I knew that he was my best friend. I knew that I loved him.

Later that day I had to say good bye to California, Lucas, my home and my heart; and say hello to New York. Somewhere new.

Author's Note

ignore grammar problems, I need a Beta! Yeah this is when they are younger. The "Push me higher part" will show up freequently cause its where everything really starts and is like a tradition for them.

Reviews

[Greg Close]

This is a pretty poignant scene. For being so brief, I'm surprised you could get there so quick - to the nostalgic place where I remember the first time one of my friends moved away. Its such a powerful thing at that age, when you have to move on and leave everything behind. I can see how the "push me higher" thing can really tie the narrative together as it keeps going. Good metaphor potential, too.

I think 8 is a good age to kick things off, too. Still an innocent age, but right about when things start to change a little, especially for the boy/girl relationship. You can maybe clarify that it's an innocent kiss (or maybe its not) just to address the point of the other reviewer that it might be a little odd if the 8 year olds were makin' out. Although that wasn't what sprang to mind initially, for me (thankfully). Good write!

[Flo_writer]

I'm assuming that she is just as old as Lucas is at this point, which is 8 years old. That's too young to be experienced at kiss and way too young to be talking about she is in love. I didn't find any grammar issues. Then again I wasn't looking but none showed up on my radar. I like what's going on in the prologue so far and it paints a clear picture of the childhood relationship between the two.