FEED THE TROLL

the air in the room is so still, the day has just begun, as the canvas in the sky fades from darkness to a new light, perhaps this day will bring promising actions, where the taste of this bitter cigarette lingers on my wool jacket, and just like a locomotive streaming its steam in the air as i make forward towards the sunrise.

why wait, each second ticks and yet you worry so much about the little details, when danger hides inside these obscurities, you kick, you raise your voice, scream

SCREAM DAMN IT!

you see, i can be just like you, did i reach any points in your mind?

no, you have no emotion, as you sit and boast your greatness around the room, i sit here and pour out the life from within and through out, keep in mind you're in it, be careful, for you will be remembered as an a*s if such a thing be your choice

you see, i can be just like you.

Reviews

[x]

Seems like you're trying to get a rise out of a self contained person.

So, well written in that respect. The reader can feel the frustration of the write.
The last line is a contridiction in terms.

[Brian Kraklau]

feed the troll duh, youre not suppose to like it

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

I don't like the style. It's like badly written prose rather than a proper poem in the true sense. The images aren't really constructed nor much care taken to push the truth of the emotion down in an artistic manner. It's more of a rant and childish pout and they glare at an elder trying to be just as they are without any sense of understanding.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very different from your other poems, I like it!

[Emily B]

troll seems to be the word for today, I like your style

[C. Porter]

Wow, I loved this! This is exactly the sort of poem I've been seeking more and more of lately, to broaden my horizons, so to speak. Anyway, I loved it. The free-form structure here definitely allows for sort of a create-your-own rhythm, as {A}shley {B}lack @-;- pointed out. THe jolting "SCREAM DAMN IT!" worked really well, interrupting the first two stanzas, eloquently keeping the reader interested. And the last line was so powerful, as it put everything else into perspective and could be interpreted several different ways. Excellent job here.

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

I really loved this dark thought provoking poem the structure for me worked really well and allowed me to create my own flow and pace
thank you for sharing this piece

100/100

[guiltyascharged]

Nice, nice. I love it.