ILL NEVER FORGET

time has come again, another page written, another sunset, another day bitten, but yet i still have that breath of air within me, staile from the hesitation, and yet it still seem empty, what have i forgotten, but you.

Reviews

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This would be beautiful, breathtaking poem if you broke up your lines. If you separated them so that the reader, so that I can wallow and drown in your stanzas, your words. Because if I can suffocate myself in this poem then I think it would create something more precious to me than the air I would need to breathe in order to live. Except for a couple grammatical mistakes, staile is spelled stale and seem should be seems, I enjoyed this poem immensely. I also loved your word choice in the line "another day bitten." All I could hear in my mind was "Another one bites the dust!" :) I don't know why but I do. Again a greatly appreciated piece and thank you for sharing!
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[Omar Fendri]

heartwarming ... simple words, short paragraph and various emotions...
excellent, :)

[Helen Woodward]

Short and to the point...sad in a sense considering the forgotten love, but can we really forget a love that inspires us to write like this?

Lovely! :-)