---rACEcARE

its raining again, the taste of a morning cigarett burns in the cold wind as i wait, a little hung over from a long night of sedation, its now time to get buisy, god that hang over is killing, as if a million little midgets in my head, stomping on the ground within my brain, yelling down the dark alleyways, banging loudly within my ears, was that music loud lastnight or what, you shouldnt have at those brownies, deep inside you knew, stupid rain, so loud on the car as the radio comes to life, feeling as if in a middle of a musical war the tunes are off again, wow, what happened lastnight, oh well the engines on, time to go, time to light another, and begin work, the salt and grime cackle under the tires, look out theres another car.

Reviews

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Very cool stream-of-consciousness.

[xlovehatealicex]

i like the description in this but the fact that theres no breaks makes me confused at times. @.@

[Dream Slave]

I see this... as personal experience from many days waking up hung over, (try since Christmas eve) that you had a great freaking time... Be happy you are not dead and didn't have to be taken to the hospital from an alcohol overdose and live on. Still young still careless... until proven otherwise.

[Charles]

Don't tell the believers, but the hare won the race... celebration... hang over... quite a poem!

[RESWAR]

so true..life's like that..a high a low..

[Calypso]

I thought this was funny. I've never had a hang over made me feel like there were midgets inside my head.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Very good imagery on a psrty and the hang over that come the next day! Great Job!

this is more like a piece of prose.
You're writing as if all your thoughts are running together, which they probably were, but then again, it's lacking emotion.

[ali]

I love the stream of consciousness and I think that you write in this style well. However, it was really hard to read- I think that you have a good sense of meter and rhythm underneath all of that prose.... Insert some line breaks! It will help the reader out. Other than that, it is really powerful piece.