---rACEcARE

its raining again, the taste of a morning cigarett burns in the cold wind as i wait, a little hung over from a long night of sedation, its now time to get buisy, god that hang over is killing, as if a million little midgets in my head, stomping on the ground within my brain, yelling down the dark alleyways, banging loudly within my ears, was that music loud lastnight or what, you shouldnt have at those brownies, deep inside you knew, stupid rain, so loud on the car as the radio comes to life, feeling as if in a middle of a musical war the tunes are off again, wow, what happened lastnight, oh well the engines on, time to go, time to light another, and begin work, the salt and grime cackle under the tires, look out theres another car.

Reviews

[Katie Lynn]

To be honest, I actually really enjoyed this poem. I normally can't stand paragraph form but the whole flow of it kept me reading until the very end! Kudos to this wonderful write. :)

[Satchmo's Gal]

I love the paragraph form. You should look through it again because there are a few spelling errors. good flow though.

[Nicholas]

Granted I've never been hung over... but... that is REALLY good! I love the imagery, the humor to the whole thing, the way you're almost conversing with yourself... one of the best poems I've ever read :D

[[Rampant♍ Rapture..]

I love this to death..so true and wonderful. Love the way of the words.

[Eileen]

It was great. Very real, scary, sad, yet humerous. Or is that just me?

[Jeffrey Gershom]

It's nice to know that you have the ability for one long coherent thought after such a party filled night. lol
Good job.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Awesome job again!

[KAREN]

Drinking and driving, not good! BUT this was an excellent read to what can happen!

[Undying Glory]

cool work, i sure haven't read anything quite like this one before. although i do agree that this one could have been improved with a bit more emotion. nice job nonetheless

[Short.Nerd]

This has a good flow. nice job