GOODNIGHT

as i lay down to dream i wish for the next sun rise to be an awakening from a deep slumber, oh how i miss that deep comfort far into the wraps of my comforter, you see that window tonight, all full of frost, tonight is a great night of dreams, far in the recesses of our minds, so will we remember this i think not, for this is only for the moment, we love these sparks in the night, bringing the warmth in the cold, dark, night, oh babe i will see you on the morrow, when the sun rises tomorrow i will see, i will breath, and walk this night again. so goodnight and take it easy, heres a kiss goodnight for all you ladies, and heres a tip of the hat for all the bros out there, but if the night gets lonely for any of you fine babes, give me a shout, goodnight.

Reviews

[Norma M Sutton]

Nice

[Brian Kraklau]

always a kiss for the babes

[Daniel Soloye]

amazing truely amazing loved it

[Tina Kline]

I like this, it starts out rather serious and then becomes slightly humorous and playful, like don't take life seriously, just enjoy it when you can. Anyway, you did a wonderful job on this piece.

[Stacey]

I started reading and thought...now I lay me down to sleep. I love those moments as you start to drift, it's like a big exhale. In the end I smiled and laughed at the "but". Thanks for the chuckle. Enjoyed reading!

[KAREN]

Reading this makes me think that the nights are so long without the one you love beside you! Nice write.

[Eileen]

Aw so adorable

[cfix]

lol. This is cute!

[underwriter]

beautiffly wrote! im likeing seeing a bit of your humor!
sudgestion for the line beginning 'so will we rember this'... i think if you add a comma after it, it would read slightly better. 'so will we rember this, i think not'.
otherwise another good write!
goodnight...

[Linzey]

i like the beginning of imagery and then the playfulness at the end