EVERYTHING IS OK

anyone can use this to interpret another, yea go head and get angry, get confused in the deepness of my world, i consume all, devour and breath, you think im the unborn truth, forced to lie, forced to conserve the unknown, you cant begin to understand, you cant begin to know, that i, am the new the legend of a far away truth, let me wrap my arms and begin, you would feel me, you wont begin to know, this is it, believe me, its ok, live, for life will keep coming, we all will rest in the end, we all will awake in the end, for truth always comes, in the end.

Reviews

[Doreen]

There's a chaotic feel to the read that I like. I think the overuse of commas takes away from what you're doing. The block form works. I do wonder why there is no capitalization; nor is there punctuation other than the commas and the final period. im should be I'm. Breath should be breathe. deepness? Is there such a word? Depth would work much better. cant should be can't. etc.. Also, "let me wrap my arms" - are you wrapping them up in something, such as gauze? Or are the arms wrapping around something, such as a person? This should be made more clear. All in all I like the vibe of this. It makes one think.

I like short pieces , and I enjoy reads from u. while I was reading this, I thought of a speaker on stage telling this.
Nice work!

[luciddreamer]

Your writings are interesting....they always make me think on a deeper level...

Peace
Robin

[D1218]

Hm had a few deep things but it was very short (not sure if that's a good or bad thing) I was just expecting a longer piece.
I did like "live, for life will keep coming" I thought that was pretty deep

[Greg Skura]

Life does keep coming and as it does we learn. How we interpret life will determine how truth is perceived, for truth is truly a double edged sword which requires balance to manage. See the truth be the truth for all else is illusion.

[Brian W. Hastings]

An absolutely great ending to this. It appears you have mastered your personal style. There are no deviations in form from this compared to the past few works I have read of yours. You start with one message and slide easily into another of which feels like a climax of the first.

[Cats Eye]

good write, basically sayin life life to fullest at least thats how I take it