FAR AWAY

listen to the words set upon the rose petals

the trail of whispering winds run dry on high leaves

orions belt looms over the car 

one more round one more dream

one way out 

through the skin

far into what i dream to be

could our soul be a part of a greater universe

towards the true nature of what is to be acknowledge

the giant doors of broken dreams open one last time

they are comming upon us 

open your eyes to the world

the rain is falling upon your brow

you are free

free like the trees 

free to choose the way to live

free to know the truth

do you know what i mean

do you know thr words 

when youre gone through the door

to meet him on the otherside

besides the river

the weaping clouds float on white sails

sweeping in from long ago

drink the water

drink from the long river

for when you swim from shore

the seas of time will comsume

will you come

with me

through you

through the door

to the otherside 

far away

Reviews

[cfix]

Simply outstanding here!
I liked this one alot. Very nicely done!

[Kerry O'Connor]

This poem shows some promise...
I like the idea of words written on rose petals, the giant door of broken dreams and the invitation at the end of the poem. It could do with some polishing and stream-lining - but you have a great idea to work with.

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

i hav e to say i sorta understood thios beautiful piece, great job.

[Cats Eye]

great write, flowed very well. I liked how there was some detail but not too much. This poems opens one mind to the other possiblities of this world

[paul]

very moving. you have a real talent

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

The progression of the tale from the images to the feelings is nicely done. It has a very good philosophical dream like feel to it. I love the opening line, that's a really nice image. The way it fades into the ending is smooth giving it a good conclusion.

[Greg Skura]

This is really beautiful and surreal! Well Done!

[Poetic Beauty]

the imagery in this poem is spectacular. It is has a feel of in this world but beyond. the tale being told is amazing and the last four lines sum up this whole piece rather well. It feels like lyrics to me and the flow is easy to follow along with.