BELIEVE

Now heres a little lesson, can you take the words, think of the different forms this all can be written, remember its only a run on sentence, re arrange rearrange with in within you.

within the wings of denial you ride, into the night, into the horrizon, where the shores are golden, but you must realize this is only a short trip, for the road back will be alone and full of thorns, have you learned yet, that there is nothing that is really what they seem, life is an illusion, you should sence that, you should understand that, you will have to start from scratch, so yes, keep on this road you will see, i am never wrong in this for i too have led a life in this time, and the grave is a steep hill to dig your fingers in, believe me, i was dead too.

Reviews

[Ry]

I don't completely understand this one, but the title itself is powerful. One word, and a strong one at that. It draws people in. This poem to me signifies some sort of inner fight for the "you," and understanding and experience from the "i." Grammatically, the commas throw me off a bit. Personally, poetry is much clearer written in stanzas. But that's just a personal opinion. This is very insightful and has a very strong meaning, I can tell, even if I don't completely understand the meaning. =)

[Jeffrey Gershom]

Yes, life is an uphill struggle. We kid ourselves in thinking that we know what it's all about. Eventhough the horizon seems near, the closer we get, we never actually get nearer to it.

Your style is on the fringe, but unique. Spelling, who cares. Unless you are submitting for publication.

[SpitfireGrrrl]

I really like the imagery here - and I enjoy the fact that the meaning is ... vague for lack of a better word. It just makes it that much easier for me to interpret it as I will. Beautiful write.

[Cats Eye]

I find that adding and deleting words in my mind makes this piece a bit easier to read.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Now I have to think! Have I been dead before? "LOL" great write

[KAREN]

Makes me stop and think! Nice write!

[Jazique]

How nice. The deep philosper. Tells you to think.

[guiltyascharged]

You died before? OMG, how was it?

[Silently Living As Haze..]

Deep thoughts. I could really feel the position you stand in for this poem. "life is an illusion" is my favorite part. Every piece I read from you is in good quality. Nice Job!!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I fixed your spelling and usage errors as well as deleting unnessesary content. And I absolutely loved the edited version.