AWAKENED

turn on the lights, the golden shores of tomorrow are coming, upon the wings of the wind, lets spiral on down, lets fly through and on up, open your eyes young child, lets see, lets feel, lets begin a new life where we will become, and understand the truth, where the past comes, the future goes, and the present is stretched in between, are you awake now?

Reviews

[Str8jacket]

I like your flow and your imagery. Now if I was big on structure, I would say to clean it up a little...But I'm not and I realize everyone has they're own style. Really great, thought provoking, poem :)

[David Keagan]

great write! imagery, flow, like usual. very consistent writer, pro!

[Tony]

Oh, I have been, sir. But it's nice to see I'm not alone.
Nice piece of time here.

[luciddreamer]

This one really is making me think

Peace
Robin

[Norma M Sutton]

The imagery in this is nice.

[Light]

oh wow! this is beautiful! i love this one! this concept completely resonates! waking up to a new reality, in a way; understanding the truth, if-you-will? beautiful imagery as well! great write!!!

-light-

[Cats Eye]

its very interesting as if you were in a dream when you wrote this

[guiltyascharged]

Was this poem, maybe, meant for someone? Anyways, I'm a very deep and thoughtful person, and honestly, I love it.

[Brian Kraklau]

i write in one long sentence yes my work is short my words are quick and to the point one run on sentence one responce but deeper than what ones eye can see more a part of myself so many feelings unable to be muttered for the extencity of it so here lies is born the run on beauty where i will run on to the sea run on through history run on inside me run on through the the idea of the minds thought flowed through simple codes and hesitations believe me this is it enjoy

[CompellingComposer]

Your words are like some kind of code... Someone with a sharp mind would be needed to crack this code... Very clever. Excellent. Love it, keep writing:)