Explanation of the 24 Hour Clock and The Difference Between Orbiting and Non-Orbiting Planets

Morning,
is after
midnight
at 00.01 am,
or at

One minute
past midnight

These planets
that are
just

Composites
of various

chemical,

mineral
components

Orbiting

nothing

and

with
nothing

orbiting
them








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Reviews

[Winslow Des Totes]

The structure of this piece makes it that the words seem to speed up in pace as I read and in that I felt as though the haste and the tension rising gave them a very exciting nature and a quality of weight. Almost like the gravitational pull of a star as it spins flying through the universe at speeds incomprehensible to our tiny monkey brains. I love the structure of this piece the best but the diction has a eerie sense of wealth and bestows great depths of knowledge beyond the obvious. Well done it was very fun to read!

[Joanne McFall]

The use of one word sentences works well with imagery of a second, time imagery, time and space, very interesting poem.

[Saoirse K.]

maybe this is my naivete speaking,
"hello speaking"
i think i'd rather be the rogue planet
on some space-time tangent
"well it's awful cold out here"
creating my own worlds, landscapes,
no satellite to spoil the view
"have you seen my craters"

this might be above my paygrade
stimulating piece though
nicely done