I Once Told You

She takes the microphone into her
hand and sings:

'If
I
was
hard
on you
it
was
because
I
was
bein' hard
on me,
too...

Ambition
has
a
blind
spot
where
some
times,
you
lose.

Me?
Baby,
I bled,
I used,
and grew.
Though the graft
that never took
still bleeds true.
(The secret
contracted
condition
is never
again to speak
to you.)

I used it
and grew.
And so
did you.
That's what
shows through.

Once
there
was
a place
where
every
thought
I 
told
to you.

(Perhaps,
all
that matters
is that
once
we shared
some
room?)

As
the final
diamond chip
flies
in front
of an
Autumnal,
jade
and
emerald
Moon.

Which,
tonight
I lay
beneath,
as I recall
the words
once,
I
confided
in
you...

I
bled,
but
still
I
grew.

Reviews

[Winslow Des Totes]

Wow; I actually heard the music to this as I wrote and I got to say it was beautiful and so very sad I wanted to cry. The structute to be honest is a little hard on the eyes but in a way it really adds to the drama and devestation of the words so I don't think changing it is necessarily a good idea I just thought I'd be honest. Still that last stanza really felt like a Whitney Huston belting out the pain kind of moment and I got to say this would be a fantastic song for a strong female vocalist to perform. Great job!

[Brett Hernan]

(I deleted my other comment.)
I didn't mean to make you feel so sad!
(I'm really pleased you connected with it so much, though.)

I'm going to change,
'(Perhaps,
all
that matters
is that
once
we shared
some
room?)'
to
'(Perhaps,
all
that matters
is that
once
we shared
the same
room?)'
back again.
That's far more personal, I think.
Thanks so much for your comments, they're both very encouraging and really are appreciated.
'

[Winslow Des Totes]

Don't be! Being sad is a necessary part of life and that which makes the joyous moments that much more! So thank you! :)

[Brett Hernan]

It's not about me anyway, it's about the lady singing.
Around me, there's blood everywhere.

[Winslow Des Totes]

Ooops forgot to rate! My bad!