The Moon And Sun

When life s***s on you.

When something goes wrong, don't give up.
Don't try to cut.
Don't try to hang.
No buts.
Just because the moon (your stressor) gets in front of the sun (your life)
That doesn't mean it's over. You'll see the sun again.
Don't do something ignorant.
Life is full of setbacks.
Kick life's a*s.
Nothing can stop you from achieving your goals.
So the moon may be there. But your sun will come back.
You can count on that.

Reviews

[Moper]

It's a good message for everybody. A reminder of some sort. It'd be good for everybody to realize that no matter how life pushes us down, we keep standing up.

Ah right, maybe removing "(your stressor)" and "(your life)" would make it smoother to read.

[Brennon]

Yeah, alright, thanks!

[LazerRays]

This is a good poem with good refrences to the moon and sun. The parentheses take out a bit of that mood.
I think we all sort of get the meaning of them :)
but, other than that, good job!

[Jessica Lima]

I like your writing style! Even during an eclipse, the sun's light still peak at us from behind the moon.

[Zoya]

Funnily enough, this was quite optimistic! The message you conveyed through this was undoubtedly a good one. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing!

[Jail Rose]

This is really good! I love how it portrays a message for those who are suffering hardships right now. Good work! I hope to see more from you!

[Unspoken poet]

Yes! Very good writing here, enjoyed this a lot

[Brennon]

Thanks a bunch!