The Black Ball, my Black Arcadia. What can I say
of thee? Your battered, rusting rides, unwashed tents, they
remind me so much of, well, mainly me. Ha-ha, you and I, as it would seem, we have a
classic, old-fashioned charm, hiding truest natures, bringing about extremes:
paradisal euphoria and purgatorial harm. Are you more than a laceration on time or space?
Perhaps it is one, but not the other. I am nestled in your bosom, like a child unto its
mother, endless, yet the end for many-a-soul. It’s a shame
there has to be so many,
though it may be best to rid them of my lunacy. You are a constant unto variables, the
condemnation for sin, a bother to those without. About it, they can whine, they can even pout, and they will. Sentient creatures are all the same, in any place one wanders, through this or the next
plane. You should know; you have been to them all. One fact remains true: I am to serve you, to clean
your bloodstained walls.
I've received mixed reviews about this poem, mixed reviews I'm proud of. I love being called "pretentious", really, I do. This isn't sarcasm, I adore it. :P
My Review
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I likethis, it has a good feel to it. I like the bounce between humble and a mocking tone that the speaker carries. It shows a glimpse into a complex relationship or feeling, and I love the ending line "I am to serve you, to clean your bloodstained walls". A chilling close, and I like it.
It does seem somewhat unpolished, with a little work on form this could really shine.
I likethis, it has a good feel to it. I like the bounce between humble and a mocking tone that the speaker carries. It shows a glimpse into a complex relationship or feeling, and I love the ending line "I am to serve you, to clean your bloodstained walls". A chilling close, and I like it.
It does seem somewhat unpolished, with a little work on form this could really shine.
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