California Sunrise

It was in a moment of fear

Not knowing which voice to hear

They all spoke and I listened

Til one idea began to glisten

I was tired and lonely that night

With no solution in viewable sight

So I calmly grabbed the car keys to go

Walking 'neath the street lamps glow

Put the keys in the car ignition

Then started up the transmission

Upon hearing the gentle motor hum

I opened the glove box to grab my gun

Pressed the button for the skylight top

Then drove for miles without a stop

I kept on and on all night long

Thinking all about what was wrong

I grabbed my gun to c**k it

But placed it back inside my pocket

I wanted to wait a few more hours

Until the sun in all of its power

Shined forth throughout the valley

The beautiful mountains of Cali

And as I drove up to my destination

I could just see the sun peak out

And I finally saw what this was about

I turned off the car and stepped out

Fingering the gun with my right hand

As I looked across the entire land

I pulled the gun out of my pocket

Brought it to my head and cocked it

Took one last look at the sunrise

And it looked to be a good day to die

And this is how I say...goodbye

 

Author's Note

This was a therapeutic poem that I wrote about suicide many years ago. If nothing else, let this serve as an example of a healthy channel for an overdose of emotions.

Reviews

[Larrycall]

sad and dark and interesting , but good and you can feel exactly what your trying to say . really deep .

[Dove]

Wow this is seriously a deep and emotional twist. I could imagine everything you described. I too have been in a serious depression and there were times where I wanted to kill myself and I didnt know who I really was. Fantastic poem!

[caitlin]

This is a really well penned piece. There is so much power in your words and the piece is full of some really great imagery, the piece flows really well too. I can relate to this piece, I used to feel this way, but I was thankfully rescued by my best friend.... to me, she saved my life because when she came into my life I had one foot hanging over the edge. Really great write.

[Sarah]

very deep and came from he heart. very nice

[Lost in Wonderland]

Wow. very deep peice, emotional and simple at the same time. I really liked it. Also I know poetry doen't have to ryhme but in this poem it just gave it a nice flow.

[Lauren Alaska]

I can honestly say that your poem really touched me.
I am going through rough time, and have be for a long time.
I can really relate to this poem and appreciate it.

This was very good, although im not good with poems I can see that you have a outstanding talent for this.

[Cwriter]

Amazing work. The imagery was unparalleled. Keep up the good work!

[Quentin Moyer]

This is really good! I loved it! I could visualize everything you were saying in this poem, it flowed wonderfully! I really liked this! A lot! Keep up the excellent work!!

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

Very powerful. I didn't expect by the title that it would be about suicide. The whole poem did play out well, and the ending wasn't really expected to me. It's kind of sad, but not the gore I was looking for. But great piece nonetheless (:

-Marie-

[Marie Harrison]

Wow! Powerful poem
What a way to go.
Love how you built
the tension in the poem.