Butterfly

I wrote him this poem after he asked me to marry him.

Never fall in love with a butterfly
She'll flutter and stop
Briefly
To kiss your petals
To drink nectar from your stem
Loving you as the sun
Warms her wings
You say you want to marry her
Enchanted by the way
Her delicate kisses
Make your petals swell
You ask her for forever
To which she'll laugh
And fly away
To the next flower
Who will blossom
To accept her gentle caresses
As she'll perch
Letting the sun warm her wings
Never fall in love with a butterfly
She'll die
In captivity

Author's Note

Please don't be too harsh!! Please comment.

Reviews

[mlundstedt]

I think it's very good! Thanks for sharing.

[zainul]

Wonderful metaphor.
Enjoyed reading.

[Brennaj]

Thank you for reading!

[zainul]

You are most welcome!

[Frieda P]

I take it you said no then...it's cleverly written, sounds like this butterfly isn't ready to settle for one petal...nicely pen'd, enjoyed.

[Brennaj]

I did, and moved back home. Thank you for reading :)!