Pain

Pain is like water.
It can be so cold and harsh
That it freezes you.
It can be so hot and scorching
That it burns you for life.
It has the power to cut and draw blood.

Reviews

[Relic]

There are many ways to look at pain. Some here the serene trickle of it and others feel its smooth gentle rocking. Here, you've shown it under another light and one can't deny your words. Pain is indeed something that can wash away happiness in an instant. Your descriptions hold lots of merit.


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[Kurayami]

This is short. I think maybe you can add another stanza which compares pain to fire to make the poem more interesting.