This dungeon

This dungeon of darkness
With walls of blood
And bodies dragged through mud.
With floors so cold,
No one knows what these walls behold.
And all I do is cry
And look into the pig's eye.

This dungeon of darkness
Where a voice is heard
By the mouth of the absurd.
His voice is dark.
Cuts through like a shark
Loud and demanding
I am a crash landing.

This dungeon of darkness
I cry every night
Never to see day
A perpetual darkness.
No love no hugs
I want it to end
And here I die.

Author's Note

All apart of a dark mind

Reviews

[Lyric]

Good job, I really really liked it:-) but if there's anything I could say it might be that it flowed a little harshly, but don't take it to heart, it's an amazing piece :-)

[alf]

Hi Breana. I love the passion that underlies your words!!! We all have to express those dark moments and you have done this with blatant emotion that fires through the words. Loved this!!! alf

[Jesse]

Don't mind me on the rating..I don't even know what I'm doing with those points... I never get any so I give them freely..lol

[Breana Seabrooks]

Please don't apologize. I love getting any and all feedback I can get.

[Jesse]

..."and look into the pigs eye' ... lovely line for an exciting dark poem? Good write!