The Painter

For a long time i've been wanting to try to write a poem in Shakespearean dialogue just because I love how you can put such deep meaning in such beautiful words. Here it is.

Hands so sweet may lay thy fingers on a picture

Color o’ gray that fade while whispers lay

‘cause bland lie the shade that paints it yellow

 

Red, green, blue, lie in shallow waters

Thy doth write in black, words not hollow

White be best of boards to travel asunder

 

Woe is thou who laughs the last

For color dost his mouth open, alas!

While thy hand rest white on thy black’st right

 

Thee who paints words know how words doth curl

Orange, blue, purple, derived from thy hollow

Ye, thee may be a fellow

 

So asunder in Leonardo’s hand, avouched hither and thither

Fie! Others lay it affray,

O’er an empty glass dost thy hands pass

 

Thee with art doth know how thy hand be cast

Color may lie true

But thy black’st word still form more hollow

Author's Note

Please critique :) If you think I can better the language please help me by pointing it out. It is the first time that I tried writing in Shakespearean prose and I definitely want to become better. I noticed that a few lines already stick out, but i am unsure as to how to fix them. Thank you for reading and commenting! :D

Reviews

[Ana Drake]

Beautifully written, your a true poet. I loved everything about it, from the writing form, to the structure. Great write :)

[Alice Crypt; Brittany]

Thank you so much! I really appreciate it :)

[Ed Fagan]

I enjoyed this as I am not a big fan of the common language writes. I do appreciate them and understand their relevance but no where is it writen that I must adhere to rules. And should it be ... well, I've never been one for following orders. :) thank you for penning this.

[Alice Crypt; Brittany]

Thank you for reviewing :) I am glad you enjoyed it!

[Yahzeya Yoel]

it touched my soul

[Miranda Richard]

I'm not the biggest fan of Shakespeare, however, your poem is very inspiring.

[Alice Crypt; Brittany]

Yeah, I noticed that quite a few people don't like Shakespeare too much on here, but I still wanted to experiment :D Glad that it inspired you though! :)