Thoughts in from the perspective of an anti hero of mine... just an idea I'm toying with.
Sirens everywhere... The ground is rocked by another explosion People run aimlessly, screaming... Screaming At the mercy of the merciless There is nowhere to hide As building after building tumbles in flames The comets fly from the b*****d's hands Rolling the sky with terrible fire The children of the earth weep tears their only shield but not against that smile He's drunk in the madness He has an answer to his pain And the pain of us all and it lies within the fire within the furnace And with that terrible grin There will only be ash
I can't win this fight Should I even try? How could I stop him? Where do I even begin? He is faster by far... How can I stay his Thunder When his hands are like lightning? The people crawl like wild animals The strength has gone out from their legs They cry out as if in the pains of labor They will parish For they cannot bare this fire They cannot withstand this fury
But I can I can withstand those terrible flames And I have felt this fury before He rises in the sky Poised like a Lion Eyes as sharp as any predator I will take his rage The lion will maul the bear Giving the little ones time to escape
I can't win this fight But I won't let him win either...
I stayed wrapped in this story throughout the write. I like the free flowing form and the amount of tension you keep with the tight lines. overall a very interesting read, even if we don't know who the anti-hero is..but how anti are the actions of one willing to sacrifice for others? That seems like the only requirement needed to be a hero.
jan
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
I agree, many people wouldn't see the "anti" because they don't know the character, and I can reveal.. read moreI agree, many people wouldn't see the "anti" because they don't know the character, and I can reveal his entirety on a single page... it was just a scene that I was playing with in my head from a story... thank you so much for your feedback!
A nice little fast-paced free verse. It's inspiring. Through the eyes of the protagonist we see the misery and sense urgency of action and through his heart we feel his bravery. Certainly enjoyed it.
I stayed wrapped in this story throughout the write. I like the free flowing form and the amount of tension you keep with the tight lines. overall a very interesting read, even if we don't know who the anti-hero is..but how anti are the actions of one willing to sacrifice for others? That seems like the only requirement needed to be a hero.
jan
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
I agree, many people wouldn't see the "anti" because they don't know the character, and I can reveal.. read moreI agree, many people wouldn't see the "anti" because they don't know the character, and I can reveal his entirety on a single page... it was just a scene that I was playing with in my head from a story... thank you so much for your feedback!
Well written and delivered!
I really enjoyed this piece and I like the message at the end, priceless!
I can't win this fight, but I won't let him win either:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thank you sir... I'm very happy you enjoyed it! You be Blessed too!