Lost

Created for the one sentence horror story contest.

He woke up to glowing eyes surrounding him and began to sob at the realization that he would never make it back home.

Reviews

[Srchaud]

Thats not bad actually. For a one sentence story it sure packs a punch.
He woke up, meaning he is disoriented alone, maybe even in the dark. Those two words already suggest vulnerabilty. Glowing eyes surronded him, bamm there is the threat, eyes in the dark its perfect just enough info to let the imagination go wild. This allows one to picture any sort of nightmares waiting in the shadows, plus its hopeless because he is surronded. Then sobbing is a nice touch it suggests deafeat, hopelessness giving the reader the idea there is no way out of the situation. Then it ends with an understanding he will die, what and how are left to ones own imagination.
Perfect.

[Paul Bell]

One line. But a whole story.

[several thousand]

Yikes!
I felt more sad than horrified but still, that's a lot of punch in just one sentence. You're good at these!