Pieces Of Me

 

When we are children  

we say forever.

(I can remember being a small child)

Then when we grow up 

more and more. 

Often, we say never.

(And the first time I have ever felt love)

Let one throw the stone 

who claims its easy.

(I was so alone)

To see the invisible. 

To touch the intangible.

(I knew of nothing so pure)

Hollow be the name 

of the one 

I have yet to see.

(Always trying to get different perspectives)

 Every day seems to me,  

one more dream. 

Until she comes to be.

(Ill be by your side)

Of the flowers,  

tears birthed from me. 

Dew drops onto the grass, 

from the sea.

 

Reviews

[jen -- JG]

This is a good poem and is indeed pieces of a person. Yet I see it as two distinct poems.
Taking the whispers out, it reads as a child's thought and dreams.

Reading the whipers alone, they come across as a reflection from someone a little older who does remember the voice and yearnings of youth but who is now prepared to accept that things are different, and in seeking those different perspectives will remain by your side - even by the side of the youth that was.

Again, I may be seeing more than there is, but this is what I get from this poem.

Regardless, I liked it very much.

jen

[Kelsey Desmond]

I little bit confusing, but quite good. Well done.

[deeps]

This is just wonderful, I liked this very much so. I can feel the emotion. It's very thought provoking

[Wondering Mind]

Another deep write; I enjoyed the format and style, especially the way you put emphasis on inner thoughts.

[darkgurl]

a very thought provoking write here, I like this and you how wrote it, very creative and has emotion in it...Kim

[Kit]

wonderful imagery, very beautiful! a lovely poem with a very elegant flow with a great use of words.

[Imperfection]

When we are children
we say forever.
(I can remember being a small child)
Then when we grow up
more and more.
Often, we say never

Very strong beginning. And so true it is.

I read it aloud to myself and loved it more with every read.
Fantastic write.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is very deep! and left me with many thoughts...
Very true piece of writing!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is spectacular work as you show the human soul as so many layers that come out at different points in lives... I really thought provoking piece.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh, this is beautiful. The flow is fantastic, great write!!!

Heather