Pieces Of Me
A Poem by
Brandon
When we are children
we say forever.
(I can remember being a small child )
Then when we grow up
more and more.
Often, we say never.
(And the first time I have ever felt love )
Let one throw the stone
who claims its easy.
(I was so alone )
To see the invisible.
To touch the intangible.
(I knew of nothing so pure )
Hollow be the name
of the one
I have yet to see.
(Always trying to get different perspectives )
Every day seems to me,
one more dream.
Until she comes to be.
(Ill be by your side )
Of the flowers,
tears birthed from me.
Dew drops onto the grass,
from the sea.
© 2009 Brandon
Featured Review
This is a good poem and is indeed pieces of a person. Yet I see it as two distinct poems.
Taking the whispers out, it reads as a child's thought and dreams.
Reading the whipers alone, they come across as a reflection from someone a little older who does remember the voice and yearnings of youth but who is now prepared to accept that things are different, and in seeking those different perspectives will remain by your side - even by the side of the youth that was.
Again, I may be seeing more than there is, but this is what I get from this poem.
Regardless, I liked it very much.
jen
Posted 16 Years Ago
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
Reviews
I little bit confusing, but quite good. Well done.
Posted 15 Years Ago
I little bit confusing, but quite good. Well done.
This is just wonderful, I liked this very much so. I can feel the emotion. It's very thought provoking
Posted 15 Years Ago
This is just wonderful, I liked this very much so. I can feel the emotion. It's very thought provoking
Another deep write; I enjoyed the format and style, especially the way you put emphasis on inner thoughts.
Posted 15 Years Ago
Another deep write; I enjoyed the format and style, especially the way you put emphasis on inner thoughts.
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
a very thought provoking write here, I like this and you how wrote it, very creative and has emotion in it...Kim
Posted 16 Years Ago
a very thought provoking write here, I like this and you how wrote it, very creative and has emotion in it...Kim
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
wonderful imagery, very beautiful! a lovely poem with a very elegant flow with a great use of words.
Posted 16 Years Ago
wonderful imagery, very beautiful! a lovely poem with a very elegant flow with a great use of words.
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
When we are children
we say forever.
(I can remember being a small child)
Then when we grow up
more and more.
Often, we say never
Very strong beginning. And so true it is.
I read it aloud to myself and loved it more with every read.
Fantastic write.
Posted 16 Years Ago
When we are children
we say forever.
(I can remember being a small child)
Then when we grow up
more and more.
Often, we say never
Very strong beginning. And so true it is.
I read it aloud to myself and loved it more with every read.
Fantastic write.
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
This is a good poem and is indeed pieces of a person. Yet I see it as two distinct poems.
Taking the whispers out, it reads as a child's thought and dreams.
Reading the whipers alone, they come across as a reflection from someone a little older who does remember the voice and yearnings of youth but who is now prepared to accept that things are different, and in seeking those different perspectives will remain by your side - even by the side of the youth that was.
Again, I may be seeing more than there is, but this is what I get from this poem.
Regardless, I liked it very much.
jen
Posted 16 Years Ago
This is a good poem and is indeed pieces of a person. Yet I see it as two distinct poems.
Taking the whispers out, it reads as a child's thought and dreams.
Reading the whipers alone, they come across as a reflection from someone a little older who does remember the voice and yearnings of youth but who is now prepared to accept that things are different, and in seeking those different perspectives will remain by your side - even by the side of the youth that was.
Again, I may be seeing more than there is, but this is what I get from this poem.
Regardless, I liked it very much.
jen
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
This is very deep! and left me with many thoughts...
Very true piece of writing!
Posted 16 Years Ago
This is very deep! and left me with many thoughts...
Very true piece of writing!
4 of 4 people found this review constructive.
This is spectacular work as you show the human soul as so many layers that come out at different points in lives... I really thought provoking piece.
Posted 16 Years Ago
This is spectacular work as you show the human soul as so many layers that come out at different points in lives... I really thought provoking piece.
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
Ooh, this is beautiful. The flow is fantastic, great write!!!
Heather
Posted 16 Years Ago
Ooh, this is beautiful. The flow is fantastic, great write!!!
Heather
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
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Hey, my name is Brandon, and welcome to my page. I was born in merced California, then I moved to Germany, then to North Dakota, than to Minnesota, and recently back to the valley in California. I am ..
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