A mere arm's length away

A mere arm's length away

A Poem by Bmmed94
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The everyday reality of being together long after the love light burns out.

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Just barely an arms length away,
Yet with so much space between the two, We are physically Together yet with our hearts miles apart. The heavy rain on the tin roof cries out into the unbroken silence of the night. The only life here is the muted movement on the television. I gaze blankly at the white angled ceiling, with beams of the passing vehicle's headlights dancing about briefly. Regardless if we try to speak the words never seem to be right. Once Something that started out with a flame so vivid and so bright has burnt out. Now we remain with the endless cold dark silent nights, both waiting quietly for inevitable end of yet another beautiful beginning.

© 2018 Bmmed94


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Beautifully put. I like that you describe the atmosphere rather than your feelings as it creates such a strong sense of how cold and uncommunicative the relationship is-instead of a expression of your feelings it feels like an gift to the reader to find their own their memories like that. I am curious about why you decided to do it as a paragraph rather than stanzas?
Well done


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bmmed94

6 Years Ago

Im glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for that. I wasn't really attempting to create an image. I was try.. read more
Emma

6 Years Ago

Yes I completely agree that the atmosphere shows your feeling stronger than any words could. I can s.. read more
Bmmed94

6 Years Ago

Again I'm really glad you could relate and enjoyed. Thanks again



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Yet another beautiful beginning. Imagery of the atmosphere was great Thanks for sharing

Posted 6 Years Ago


There's wonderful imagery in this piece. It really put me in the setting and allowed me to see and hear everything. I particularly liked "Together yet with our hearts miles apart." Speaks volumes.

Yari

Posted 6 Years Ago


I like this. After reading my heart ached for a moment. Then I remembered if was true you can get it back. The is how we make things last. Very bittersweet read. Good job making us feel.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Beautifully put. I like that you describe the atmosphere rather than your feelings as it creates such a strong sense of how cold and uncommunicative the relationship is-instead of a expression of your feelings it feels like an gift to the reader to find their own their memories like that. I am curious about why you decided to do it as a paragraph rather than stanzas?
Well done


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bmmed94

6 Years Ago

Im glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for that. I wasn't really attempting to create an image. I was try.. read more
Emma

6 Years Ago

Yes I completely agree that the atmosphere shows your feeling stronger than any words could. I can s.. read more
Bmmed94

6 Years Ago

Again I'm really glad you could relate and enjoyed. Thanks again
I like it. Distance can either make or break us. Been there and it's not easy. It's not for the soft. The salad days or the beginning days come on strong and you just never know how it will turn out. We roll the dice i guess. Nice work

Posted 6 Years Ago


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but it was beautiful while it lasted,and i wonder,does real love ever die

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Added on February 9, 2018
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Bmmed94
Bmmed94

Red bay, AL



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My name is Brandon I just turned 24 on February 7th. I used to write some poetry in highschool. All in all I'm very green to writing full length works, this is actually the first. Im optimistic that y.. more..

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