My Hero

When I was stuck in the darkness

Lost in broken emotions

Torn apart from the pain

Drowning in negativity

In need of one's love

Yet denying help from everyone

You saw something in me and you came my way

When my heart was in pieces 

When I felt so shattered

My soul lost in a mist that blinded me

A zombie with no hope no sense of direction

Yet you came by and gave me a chance at your love

You made me feel so welcome

You loved and cared for me

you showed me the beauty that existed in me

A beacon of light

Drowned me in the waters of positivity

Thawed out my frozen heart

Catering for emotions i thought i had lost

Put my pieces together

Despite how deep each cut you in the process

You gave me a reason to live and love again

I feel like i owe you

Though I don't know how to repay you

I'm truly grateful for your love

All I can do is give you all that I can

That's the only promise i know I can keep well

And when I look at you

All I can do is bashfully smile

You are My Hero.

Reviews

[Aehr]

A very nice and heartfelt poem. I particularly liked some parts.

'In need of one's love
Yet denying help from everyone'

The above lines, though simple, say a lot about the poet, and a lot of other people as well. Many of us are thirsting for love but denying our need for it, for we do not want to be seen as weak, or needy. It is a conflict - are we trying to prove our strength to ourselves or to those around us?

'My soul lost in a mist that blinded me'

Great description. Reading this line, I could see an image of a person, lost, seeking help, wandering. Well done.

Keep writing.

[PHFASCES]

Thank you very much for the review and the motivation. I'm truly grateful

[zunie frost]

i can imagine every thing as i read this .... i was actually gonna cry .. so emotional and loving poetry .really love this !!!! 1005 ratings for me ....

[PHFASCES]

Thank you very much. wow

[zunie frost]

my pleasure !!!!!

[Kgorometja]

On another level, hold on to this person

[PHFASCES]

haha. thank you

[viola]

I like your images.
Two suggestions. First, think about punctuation. I feel like I'm never allowed to breathe throughout the entire poem!
Second, be very picky about the use of conjunctions, especially at the beginning of lines. Sometimes they connect thoughts well, but often you can just start the new thought and it will have more power without the conjunction.
Finally a question, can you explain when you do and don't capitalize I? Is it a conscious choice or random?

Good poem!

[PHFASCES]

I just zone out and let my mind and fingers do the work and when i snap out of it when the idea has been laid out, I post it.Thank you for the suggestions. I will definitely keep them in mind.

[JayDee]

Stunning. Really adore this one

[Bohrium Guy]

"When my heart was in pieces
When I felt so shattered
My soul lost in a mist that blinded me
A zombie with no hope no sense of direction
Yet you came by and gave me a chance at your love"

The best stanza yet. Excellent job my friend....

~Rob~

[PHFASCES]

Thank you so much. I highly appreciate it.

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

very much welcome

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

THIS IS BEAUTIFUL AND AMAZING!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[PHFASCES]

I'm glad you loved it. Thank you