You

The destruction and recreation of the world...not my best, but one of my personal favorites...please please read this one!

You (2007)

For thirty years I cried

And on the thirty first

God’s promise was

Proved to be a lie,

For every mountaintop and hillside

Was flooded with flowing tears

That fell from my eyes.

I gathered up all I knew

And decided to rebuild

The world anew. 2 by 2

I gathered hate and envy

Arrogance and deceit

Lust and laziness

Fear and greed and

A submissive wife

To pair along me.

We repopulated the world. 2 by 2.

And out of our incest

We created You and You.

Building separate kingdoms

Divided by shifting sands,

You and You competed

To build cities more grand.

You and You fought

And You and You died.

But then came their sons;

There names were You (Too),

With each one trying to do

What their fathers failed to.

But both were equal

In every single way

And both You (Too’s) died;

Died in their father’s name.

And so came You Three’s

Who did the same things.

After You Three’s, came

The 4s and 5s and 6s.

They all killed each other

With the same strong conviction.

Eventually all was dead

In the bloodline of the You’s.

But then came the rise of

Him, He, Me and Me (Too’s).

They followed the precedent

Left by their predecessors.

And invented more ways

To kill each other better.

They built more kingdoms

In the expanding sands.

And died to claim from each other

More blood soaked lands.

They fought and fought and fought

Until none was left alive.

This sad story man is

The blessings of a cursed life.

A tale told by my father,

Passed from Me to You to You.

The history of our people

You must now pass on too.

Reviews

[MaryP]

Extremley insightful. In fact I really I enjoyed reading it. It had a slight hint of Dr Zeuss in there, perhaps that was just me, but i think it came from the clever use of "me" and "you".

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what a really clever way to portray the rise and rise of man..(LOL)..this has it's roots in bibical idealogy but you have twisted the tale and made it modern, insight and indeed relevant.

[Lilly]

It is a sad tale you tell but there is such power and truth in your words here. I think this is written wonderfully and the repetition of phrases works really well. You have managed to include many elements in this poem...a thought provoking and 'deep' write. Great work - I enjoyed this.

[Sugar Plum ♥]

this poem reminds me of so many things in once, like Biblical story of Noy, and the wars, the generations, the sense of everything...It`s really deep...
Wonderful :)

[David W Moore III]

so very true... sad but tru. Nicely done. I like the use of you and me