Unconvetional Substitutions

I'm starting to feel really left out of things again.

I just say that I don't know what to say,
that nothing comes to mind,
and you're trying to tell me that that's okay,
and just to leave the idea of it all behind.
I just don't know where to go to,
what words could replace memories replaced by the doubt of it all.
I just don't know what the right things are to show,
because everytime I try to run i'm reminded of how often I crawl.

Just what's the big deal?
Where's the fools paradise hiding these days?
Is this the only way to feel?
Even inside you can't escape the sun's harmful rays.
You're always going to feel this way.
it'll carry on, and you'll never have a say.
Hopelessly hopeful, and that's how it'll stay.

I just don't want you to tell me things that you don't mean,
and I don't want to see these thigns that you never meant to show me.
There's nothing I could say or do to let you know that I haven't spoken a lie,
and there's nothing I could say or do to make me worth the time.
It's funny how I feel that I could never compare,
my thoughts being places i'd never want them near.
I hope that you're happy, though,
because I never told a lie,
and I hope you know that I really feel that I could be just the best guy.

It's all the possibilities,
and all the resolutions.
All the common ground on which we stand,
and unconventional substitutions.
There is nothing that could ever replace
what you have left in my mouth, this horrible taste
of first loves, ticking time bombs, and hearts on parade,
like the words that i've left as a memory-stain
on the last that you had of what I had gave.
 

Reviews

[Niki Disaster]

This read very smoothly. It has a lot of nice flow, but it is sometimes broken by the rhyme scheme. I really loved the ending of the last stanza though:

"There is nothing that could ever replace
what you have left in my mouth, this horrible taste
of first loves, ticking time bombs, and hearts on parade,
like the words that i've left as a memory-stain
on the last that you had of what I had gave."

it's direct and to the point, and the imagery is great! I loved it.