The Deciding Factor

Keep eachother close,

let's sit by the fire.

Look deep into the burning wood,

and we'll learn how to feel,

all

over

again.

I remember always blistering my feet from riding around so much.

So many places to be,

and time stood still,

just because time was never the deciding factor.

I remember each, and every turn we took.

I remember each, and every beautiful moment,

dancing in the streets.

We were always so close,

and I never even knew it.

We were always shimmering,

our faces painted with a mask of excitement,

and a desire to learn.

Life was many roads,

and laid out smooth,

and never did I get a flat,

not all summer long.

Reviews

[Annalisa]

This was nice, I'm glad I stumbled upon you while I was searching for someone else. The poem is simple yet sweet and you make it very easy for the reader to picture the scene in their heads as they read... This was wonderful... At first I was going to suggest making "all/ over/ again." into one line... but now that i think about it i like it the way it is.

..............and this is completely random, but I find it very cool that we have the same last name O.O I have never met anyone else named Hontz. ^^

[Mariah]

I thought it was impossible for a 14 year old boy to be into poetry...let alone be good at writing it. You're not typical. And neither is your writing. ;)