Sins Of The Father

SINS OF THE FATHER

 

It seems like yesterday
That you were taking me
Out on my shiny new bike

Riding and laughing
All day long
Going out for ice-cream
Going to baseball games
Lifting weights with me

Fishing and camping
Fire pits at night with guitar, and song
Hiking and days of adventure
We would play tag
Hide and seek
Play miniature golf
Talk all day

Back when I was four
Back when
I felt like
I was your little boy

 

 

As the years
Passed by
That little boy grew

The time
That we had
To spend with each other
Dwindled, and shrank
Guitar, and song by fire
Turned into just guitar
In a stuffy hotel room

Staying at your house
Catching lizards
Roaming around and up the hill

That lay behind the house
To the highest point
Staring into the distant horizon
Watching the cars
That from so high
Looked so small

Waiting for you to come home
So we could play
Pokémon monopoly
Battleship and chess
It all became so distant
Like the horizon
That I stood on

Back when
you left us for her
Back when
I was your little boy

 

 

Now here I am
A handsome
Wise young man

I've pushed through my life
Done the best I could do
I've tried
To get your attention
To get you to love me
I've sat and watched
While you raised him
As I felt like
I was outside
Crying in the rain
Looking through the window
Just like a Christmas tale
Wondering why

Why have you cast me aside?
Have you forgotten about me?
What have I done wrong?
Am I not good enough?

It seems like
You've missed
20 years of my life
And Haven't flinched
For you've started a new family

You send cards
With money
Like trying to buy my love
When calling me
Every now and again
Would mean so much more

But every year and day
I wonder
All the same things
I feel
All the same pain
Because the only thing
I really want
Is what I've always asked
Prayed for
All I want
Is to be
Your little boy

Author's Note

usually, when I write in my book, , my lines are all right under one another, so this whole "breaking it up" thing is totally new to me. I am not sure how/if it looks and flows well so any input is amazing.

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

I enjoyed the imagery that came with this piece
as for the content- you are a strong young man it takes strength to write what we normally hide
money in envelopes...not a dad but the gift that he has given- you to the world
Bradley your killin me with this- and that is what writing should do...cause emotion,spark a feeling and connect the reader
what I learned from my bad parents- How to be the best mom ever!*)*)
thank you ...now I need a tissue and some coffee!

[Nick.B]

A very sad and amazing write, good job

[Kristin Lee]

this is incredibly heartfelt, and incredibly sad. The loss of a partent, be it through death or divorce sits heavily with children, a burden that can never be undone. This is such a healthy outlet for your pain and sorrow.

In terms of your authors note I might offer this suggestion: write it as if you would speak it, so that everything has a syncapated/particular rythm.

Great write up. I love the emotion.

[Veronica Chandler]

I like the way you have separated the lines; it flows and reads so smoothly. The emotion in this is palpable and the subject so relateable...sad, but it seems like broken families are the norm these days. The pain of such losses are forever tattooed on our spirits; our circumstances are what they are, but we get to choose how they will impact our now. My pain is now an integral part of my beauty. Your writing is heartfelt and honest, and I for one am so happy to see you here writing! Bravo!

[Baby Ricochet]

Powerful with much emotion. Good Work

[Bradley Layton]

thank you ricochet

[Sami Khalil]

A great write down memory lane with sadness in your heart that is very relatable and captured great moments. Well written and very nice...:)

[Bradley Layton]

:) thank you sami, when I wrote it, it was rather hard

[Sami Khalil]

I can feel it ... Be blessed . Have a great one ...:)

[icelandicblue]

Some people can compartmentalize their lives without a thought to the effect on others. I found this piece to be very touching-we all carry our inner child and so many of the hurts still feel fresh.

[Bradley Layton]

yes they do, I try to hide it and it generally works for the most part but when it doesnt I go do what I know helps. thank you :)

[Jack...]

Brad, this looks and feels great and is so very sad. I am sure this will touch more than a few of those who read this. Very nicely done.

[Bradley Layton]

thank you very much jack