Acceptance

too often

I have prayed

to understand

the things

I cannot change

so I can move on

and live the things

I can

yet still

no insight

has reared

no magic

has appeared

in my life

all distilled

and unfurled

to dissolve this

powerless feeling

inferred:

unravelled

frustration

distraction

confusion

uncurled

ineffective me

intolerable being

immovable world

but then there was pause

and a moment of wisdom

simplified for a justly

chastised fool

and thus conveyed

from the source

seeming so unlikely

and so unlike

what I had presumed

a God would give

uttered in somewhat

muttered and muted

monosyllabic

reverb:

'it is what it is'

he said

no more

just what was

required:

'it is what it is'

and it was

Author's Note

Really uncertain about this one. Please be brutally critical and tell me where you think I can improve with another edit...

Reviews

[Penulis Kecil]

I like this a lot, but it seems too broken up to me; it gives it a jolt that takes me away from the power that these words could truly hold. That said, the words themselves are good; you've made powerful choices and though you've used a selection of "dictionary words", it doesn't read as though you've deliberately chosen the most pretentious words you could think of and used them. It's natural and the style of the words themselves fits with the poem's message.

The message, by the way, is an excellent one and well addressed within your style. I like how you build to the necessity of acceptance, and the peace found within it.

With some juggling of your line breaks, my favourite parts were your opener and closer.

[Arianna]

i love the way you say things.
and the concept of the poem.
but i think if you re worked the layout
so that when you read it.
it sounds like the way you would really read it to people.
it would be a much more effective poem.

[Tasha]

I like it broken up, it gives/adds more depth to this piece and I think it gives more power to make it even stronger. All in all great write.
♥ Ta'Shandra