Desire

Desire

A Poem by Boudene

There is a burning desire in my soul
Something so powerful and mystical
Like flames that dance within my core
Weaving through my blood and bones

Causing a desperate need...
For our souls to intertwine as one
To form a connection deeper than love
Creating a bond of true intimacy

© 2015 Boudene


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Boudene
One of my very first poems.

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Now, before I start this review, be warned that I am a very nitpickish person. I have nothing against you or your work, just be warned.

This could of been better. It is only giving a very brief and and unclear scene, and is never expanded upon because of how strangely short it is. It has great wording, but the poem could of definitely been longer to give the reader a very long-lasting sense of immersion so they feel like they can rely on you to create great poems. Everything starts out small, and this poem is a prime example.

You have potential, and your choice of wording being combined with a longer poem could potentially create something beautiful and captivating.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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fire have importance in poetry
it represents highest elevation of spirit

good use of imagery
and enjoyable poem

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Now, before I start this review, be warned that I am a very nitpickish person. I have nothing against you or your work, just be warned.

This could of been better. It is only giving a very brief and and unclear scene, and is never expanded upon because of how strangely short it is. It has great wording, but the poem could of definitely been longer to give the reader a very long-lasting sense of immersion so they feel like they can rely on you to create great poems. Everything starts out small, and this poem is a prime example.

You have potential, and your choice of wording being combined with a longer poem could potentially create something beautiful and captivating.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short and sweet! Beautiful piece of work, I'm longing for that same thing.
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Is beauty poem, with a journey of feelings. Is very intense and the scenes are very beautiful. Thanks for share your talent, I hope you write more poems, I will be your follower.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 16, 2015
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Tags: Burning, desire, soul, powerful, mystical, flames, core, blood, bones, connection, desperate, bond, intimacy

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