The Light

The second poem in my new poetry series. Obviously going along with dark.

It protects me,
all around.

From that monster,
the black abyss.

That same abyss,
that feelings go into.

To be shred up, torn.
Born new again.

But this light;
this bright light. 

It saves me so.
It's all around, to hide the darkness.

It's only in the shadows now,
but still there.

Just like it always will be,
a mere fact.

That for the rest of my life,
the light can not overpower the dark.

Author's Note

I love constructive criticism and any grammar/spelling mistakes, I'd love to know. I feel as if I screwed up this poem, I'd love any help possible on making it better.

Reviews

[Weaver]

My first advice is to change this to a darker font. Although the pale color does fit the idea of the poem, it is VERY hard to read. (I had to copy to a Word file and change it to black to read it at all.)

Although there are no hard-and-fast rules for punctuation in poetry, if you do use it, you don't want to use it incorrectly. Apostrophes, for example, are more spelling than punctuation ("it's" and "its" are different words), and need to be included regardless.

This poem is nearly perfect, punctuation-wise; I found only one error, and it was a small one. There should be no comma after "That same abyss"

[Babieegirl]

I really don't think you should make it any better. i find it perfect the way it is, actually. b/c it's your style of writing. if your trying to symbolize something, maybe you can make it more easier to see what your symbolizing.