Paradise Love

Today my mind drifted 

Into this beautiful place

 I never knew existed 

It was deep within my heart 

What I thought cold and unforgiving 

What do I deserve to be in a place thats so bold and uplifting?

As I browsed my thoughts wondering 

Words couldn't define what seemed like a memory

It arose from the  blue waters like a triumphant 

and smooth image 

That I could keep rewinding back from the beginning 

As It neared me this image  became a body so revealing 

So tenacious was her hips and eyes 

An skin like the suns radiant vibes

Her steps were soft enough not to leave a trail I could follow her by

As if she was floating figuring she'd just past me by

But she looked straight into my soul 

An saw something that love couldn't even hold 

A heart thats unconditional something special that was never known

 casting a shadow of security I hope we both never hurt from

Infatuation lust or love all come in different forms 

Were just all waiting to fall for the one that combines all three in one.

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Your poem paints an interesting dream image. A couple of small suggestions. You use the word 'an' several times where it looks like 'and' might work better (you probably would catch that doing a careful proofread). Also, some of the sentences seem a little too long and ponderous, which interrupts the otherwise smooth flow of your piece. No big deal. And, the last line you could possibly replace 'Were just all waiting' with 'I'm just waiting', although that might change your meaning. Or not. Anyway, it's a nice poem.