Six Foot Silence

Six Foot Silence

A Poem by Bonnie Masters
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Just a little diddy done in a moment of madness, hope you enjoy, if not, comment and tell me how to improve!

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Can't you feel the silence
the stillness all around?
That corpse is lying there,
still and silent on the ground.

And as she slumbers, waiting
a man above her stands,
fingers together in prayer position,
her life now in his hands.

Her gaze is straight and steady
not a care in her world
the man steps around her figure
his gaze much more absurd.

His pulse is jumping frantic,
black heart with sweet goodbyes,
he stares into the pits of life,
which once were lady's eyes.

Can't you feel the silence,
it's rolling out in waves.
Crashing and uncaring,
to which we all are slaves.

© 2012 Bonnie Masters


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in a moment of madness? this is a piece of real beauty and I think you definitely have a kind of great faculty in your mind which when switched on to so-called madness emanates deep thoughts. I really went emotional with the poem! It's so beautifully sad!

"he stares into the pits of life,
which once were lady's eyes"

I became tearful here...

A huge applause for the magnificent poem!



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wow, thank you three very much! I look forward to hearing from your all soon and I look forward to reading your material too. Thanks again!

Posted 12 Years Ago


in a moment of madness? this is a piece of real beauty and I think you definitely have a kind of great faculty in your mind which when switched on to so-called madness emanates deep thoughts. I really went emotional with the poem! It's so beautifully sad!

"he stares into the pits of life,
which once were lady's eyes"

I became tearful here...

A huge applause for the magnificent poem!



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

its a sweet poem plus i think you write dark stuff or pretty much random but overall good poem man

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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A very well written and interesting poem. The poem was flawless for the most part. You do have one minor typo though. "a man above he stands," I think you meant "her" not "he." Other than that, the poem was very good.

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Added on March 7, 2012
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Tags: death, silence, murder, men, women, care

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Bonnie Masters
Bonnie Masters

Manchester, Greater Manchester, United Kingdom



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I'm a college student who enjoys writing poetry, short stories and sometimes full length novels when the time screams for it! I enjoy feedback so whenever you can send me a message or a comment and.. more..

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