End Of An Era

True story relating to incidents over the last few years

Oh how I miss those long gone days,

Where we would ride the night away,

Upon our bikes both loud and fast,

Hoping that the night would last.

 

Unfortunately, these days are gone,

Our numbers faded one by one.

Some lived on and some did not,

Yet not one of them will be forgot.

 

So my friend, it's you and I,

And as we say our last goodbye,

I can't help but feel so very sad,

About the times that we once had.

 

And now you leave me all alone,

You go away without your phone,

So we may never meet again,

And I have lost an old true friend.

 

A sadness runs throughout this rhyme,

And i'm sure that it will heal in time,

But now my souls a little hollow,

So I will drink untill tommorrow,

 

Until my heart has said its piece,

And peacefully i'll fall to sleep.

Where i'll dream of times so fun,

like you and I sat drinking Rum.

 

Goodbye Damien, my Jamaican friend.

I'll remember you, untill the end.

Author's Note

Just wrote it straight from the heart really, a rare sad piece from me I think, I don't do many.

A tribute to my friend, who will probably never see it. I wish i'd never had to write it.

I'll fix mistakes later.

Reviews

[Katie Louise Hughes]

This is soo touching, even with some hints of humor in there. I do really like your writing style; it's rare to find such a writer who can mix humor with sentiment. I'm sure your friend, if he ever reads this, will forever have a smile stamped on his face! :D Thanks for the read!

[Sami Khalil]

"A sadness runs throughout this rhyme,
And i'm sure that it will heal in time,
But now my souls a little hollow,
So I will drink untill tommorrow,"
Sad and emotive...
A good rhyming poem...:).........................

[Craba]

Whoa! This is so powerful and sincere.
Enjoyed this, you write with heart....

[The Half-Blood Princes]

I like it. The flow works nicely, and the rhymes don't feel forced or just thrown in there. Good work.

-Half Blood Princes

[Lia]

What a beautiful poem. It's never easy losing somebody we care for and this is an amazing tribute to your friend. You express how great a friend he was and the darkness of mourning somebody you love. Thanks for sharing such an intimate piece.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Good work maintaining the rhyme scheme and rhythm. It is sad when you reach that age where people start drifting. But, as your poem says, we always have the memories of good times.
Overall, a nice piece of personal writing.

Couple of grammar notes:
"untill" [until]
"souls a little hollow" [soul's]

[Tate Morgan]

I see this as a good work I like it it tells a story beginning to ends and isn't full to the rim with adjectives I love rhythm and rhyme.As you will find in my work .I count different syllable amounts through out Do you count syllables or meter such as length .I will say this Of all i have read this is the most promising in a year

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Very touching. :]

[Gangsta Possum!!]

Wow this was so touching and meaningful. I love your writing style! You have such a way with words that makes them flow and touch the reader! :)