Coldness Comes

Thoughts on how I see today's society in regards to romance and love...

The world is not slowly getting hot,

It's getting colder, twisted and bought.

Layers of lies enclosed in packets truth,

Old dying off to enable the stricken youth.

Caring is non essential its paid or it's sold,

Feelings are less existent nothing is told.

Blinded by pre programming at the start,

Told to trust money and not your heart.

Erotica becomes beatings to feel the care,

Smothering emotions the superficial flare.

No commitment to stay in a relationship,

It's easier to leave if you treat it as a trip.

Romance and passion have garnished blame,

Died out religion and without a candles flame.

Its dark and death seems all to easy to be used,

Maybe it's people like me that gets tarnished and bruised.

Reviews

[Darian B.]

The ones who feel deepest hurt the most. When we put everything our soul has to offer out there and end up used and abused by the end of it, it is hard to find hope in this messed up world. In the end we have to make a choice: stay true to our morals and get hurt, or give in to the pressure and hurt others. There is no more love, no romance, what the world calls passion is really just lust, but some of us try to hold to the feelings that get us hurt time and time again. You know what its like and you wrote truthfully and beautifully. Thank you for sharing this.

[Bohrium Guy]

Thank you my friend, you are spot on where I meant to reach.

Thank you very much for taking the time to read my write.

~Rob~

[Moonie]

I love the rhymes in here, and the sentiment. A few corrections in the spellings are needed though...maybe you wrote it in a hurry...but I have a habit of pointing out typos and spelling mistakes...as correct spellings make the piece all the more wonderful and appealing.
1) you've used its instead of it's at many points.
2) in the 3rd line you could use "packets of truth" or " packeted truth"
3) last line...try.." maybe it's people like me, who get bruised"....you could alter my version a bit to make it scan.
:)))

[Bohrium Guy]

Yea... I do raw write and often from my cell. Speech to text without double checking. Thanks for your notations. I will adjust them in the later morning.

~Rob~

[Jade]

No commitment to stay in a relationship,
Its easier to leave if you treat it as a trip.

I totally loved this part, awesome write

[Bohrium Guy]

Thanks!

~Rob~